Looking for Feedback on my Karate Paper

[sperki]

First of all, I'm quite impressed with the paper. I haven't read the whole thing, but I started as a skeptic (after reading enough poorly written posts and emails I've become jaded about peoples ability to write) but I actually want to make time to read the rest of your paper!

As far as writing a paper for advancement: I think doing a little research and writing about it is a great way to learn. I have not had to write anything for my sensei, but I have read several books about the philosophies behind Karate-do. So if your interested in martial arts for the "art" and history it makes a lot of sense. If you study MA's just to get in the MMA ring then you might have a different perspective.